Most recent edit on 2005-10-28 14:13:49 by EschaTon
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Football can come down to a game of inches to decide a victor.[:] [i]nches short of a first down to continue a rallying drive;[,] inches wide of the goal posts;[,] [or] inches from a receiver’s finger tips. But [However,] this game of inches is more than just that [this sentence doesn't really makes sense]. Winning a game comes down to teamwork, heart, determination, talent, and atmosphere [good sentence]. Teams are made and broken on these principles. Outside factors do exist and can be a big part of the outcome. Take for instance referees. They play a large role in the game and in the case of the Penn State versus Michigan played a huge role in determining the victor. [This needs to cohere more. Do you want to say that while outside adversity exists, a team has to want to win? or what?]
Several factors went into the Penn State loss. One factor was the two field goals Kevin Kelley missed (45 and 32 yards) after having had a nearly flawless season, having made [making] 9 of 11 to that point (post-gazette.com). That would have given Penn State an extra six points and enough for the win. It could have also changed the whole momentum of the game so [that it] might not have been as close in the end. As a result the score at halftime was 3-0 in favor of Michigan (sports.yahoo.com). Michigan also had its field goal woes but they only missed one. Even if they had made theirs too, Penn State would have won the game by one point or at least had the chance for overtime. Time ran out as Michigan scored the winning points so they did not have to kick the extra point.
Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne, the Michigan quarterback, threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that[,] in fact[,] the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds[,] nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference initiated the instant replay craze in college football (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno) (wikipedia.org). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before[,] the instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds [begs] the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down, running more time off the clock as well [this sentence is a bit of a run-on].
“By most measurements it is a tiny sliver of time - a heartbeat-and-a-half, a sigh, a hiccup. It also can seem like an eternity (philly.com).” [While an excellent quote, this sentence lacks context. Find a way to weave quotes into the context of your paper.]The biggest factor in the loss was the addition of two seconds onto the clock after Michigan called time out. Michigan coach Lloyd Carr stormed over to the side judge and started giving him a[n] mouth [ear] full. As a result the head official came over and discussed with him the point at which the time out was called. Whether or not his talking to the official had anything to do with the time change or not[,] we will never know. However, as a result, two seconds was [were] added to the clock [seconds is plural]. The play Michigan ran before the winning score stopped the clock with one second left, a second that was added for the time[-]out discrepancy. Without the two added seconds[,] the game would have been over right there and then, as no time would have remained on the clock for another play. Game over. Two seconds proved to be one too many (philly.com). [At the same time, shouldn't the defense have not left an open receiver in the end zone?]
[This paper is unclear as to what it is arguing. Are you saying that external factors caused the lose? Or the players? I don't understand. Also, this paper indicates a continued misunderstanding of comma usage and proper sentence structure.]
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Football can come down to a game of inches to decide a victor. Inches short of a first down to continue a rallying drive; inches wide of the goal posts; inches from a receiver’s finger tips. But this game of inches is more than just that. Winning a game comes down to teamwork, heart, determination, talent, and atmosphere. Teams are made and broken on these principles. Outside factors do exist and can be a big part of the outcome. Take for instance referees. They play a large role in the game and in the case of the Penn State versus Michigan played a huge role in determining the victor.
Several factors went into the Penn State loss. One factor was the two field goals Kevin Kelley missed (45 and 32 yards) after having had a nearly flawless season, having made 9 of 11 to that point (post-gazette.com). That would have given Penn State an extra six points and enough for the win. It could have also changed the whole momentum of the game so might not have been as close in the end. As a result the score at halftime was 3-0 in favor of Michigan (sports.yahoo.com). Michigan also had its field goal woes but they only missed one. Even if they had made theirs too, Penn State would have won the game by one point or at least had the chance for overtime. Time ran out as Michigan scored the winning points so they did not have to kick the extra point.
Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne, the Michigan quarterback, threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that in fact the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference initiated the instant replay craze in college football (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno) (wikipedia.org). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before the
instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down, running more time off the clock as well.
“By most measurements it is a tiny sliver of time - a heartbeat-and-a-half, a sigh, a hiccup. It also can seem like an eternity (philly.com).” The biggest factor in the loss was the addition of two seconds onto the clock after Michigan called time out. Michigan coach Lloyd Carr stormed over to the side judge and started giving him a mouth full. As a result the head official came over and discussed with him the point at which the time out was called. Whether or not his talking to the official had anything to do with the time change or not we will never know. However, as a result, two seconds was added to the clock. The play Michigan ran before the winning score stopped the clock with one second left, a second that was added for the time out discrepancy. Without the two added seconds the game would have been over right there and then, as no time would have remained on the clock for another play. Game over. Two seconds proved to be one too many (philly.com).
Edited on 2005-10-28 14:03:53 by EschaTon
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Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne, the Michigan quarterback, threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that in fact the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference initiated the instant replay craze in college football (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno) (wikipedia.org). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before the
instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down, running more time off the clock as well.
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Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne, the Michigan quarterback, threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that in fact the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference initiated the instant replay craze in college football (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno) (wikipedia.org). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before the instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down, running more time off the clock as well.
Edited on 2005-10-19 16:59:29 by DrDoctor
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Football can come down to a game of inches to decide a victor. Inches short of a first down to continue a rallying drive; inches wide of the goal posts; inches from a receiver’s finger tips. But this game of inches is more than just that. Winning a game comes down to teamwork, heart, determination, talent, and atmosphere. Teams are made and broken on these principles. Outside factors do exist and can be a big part of the outcome. Take for instance referees. They play a large role in the game and in the case of the Penn State versus Michigan played a huge role in determining the victor.
Several factors went into the Penn State loss. One factor was the two field goals Kevin Kelley missed (45 and 32 yards) after having had a nearly flawless season, having made 9 of 11 to that point (post-gazette.com). That would have given Penn State an extra six points and enough for the win. It could have also changed the whole momentum of the game so might not have been as close in the end. As a result the score at halftime was 3-0 in favor of Michigan (sports.yahoo.com). Michigan also had its field goal woes but they only missed one. Even if they had made theirs too, Penn State would have won the game by one point or at least had the chance for overtime. Time ran out as Michigan scored the winning points so they did not have to kick the extra point.
Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne, the Michigan quarterback, threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that in fact the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference initiated the instant replay craze in college football (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno) (wikipedia.org). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before the instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down, running more time off the clock as well.
“By most measurements it is a tiny sliver of time - a heartbeat-and-a-half, a sigh, a hiccup. It also can seem like an eternity (philly.com).” The biggest factor in the loss was the addition of two seconds onto the clock after Michigan called time out. Michigan coach Lloyd Carr stormed over to the side judge and started giving him a mouth full. As a result the head official came over and discussed with him the point at which the time out was called. Whether or not his talking to the official had anything to do with the time change or not we will never know. However, as a result, two seconds was added to the clock. The play Michigan ran before the winning score stopped the clock with one second left, a second that was added for the time out discrepancy. Without the two added seconds the game would have been over right there and then, as no time would have remained on the clock for another play. Game over. Two seconds proved to be one too many (philly.com).
While some may say Penn State just was not good enough to beat Michigan, losing for the sixth straight year, it is clear that mistakes on the part of players and officials played a big part in the loss. Everyone always looks to blame someone else when things do not go the way they want. Referees are often the scapegoats and take a lot of criticism. Players are usually next in line to get the blame. In their losing effort Penn State suffered from both of these causes. While the play of the players might not have been enough to win the calls made by the referees hugely impacted the game. No wonder Joe Paterno argued for instant replay.
Works Cited
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Instant_replay∞
http://sports.yahoo.com/ncaaf/boxscore?gid=200510150029∞
http://www.philly.com/mld/dailynews/12922105.htm∞
http://www.post-gazette.com/pg/05289/589472.stm∞
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Football can come down to a game of inches to decide a victor. Inches short of a first down to continue a rallying drive; inches wide of the goal posts; inches from a receiver’s finger tips. But this game of inches is more than just that. Winning a game comes down to teamwork, heart, determination, talent, and the atmosphere. Teams are made and broke on these principles. Outside factors do exist and can be a big part of the outcome. Take for instance referees. They play a large role in the game and in the case of the Penn State versus Michigan played a huge role in determining the victor.
Several factors went into the Penn State loss. One factor was the two field goals Kevin Kelley missed after having had a flawless season to that point. That would have giving Penn State an extra six points and enough for the win. Michigan also had its field goals woes but they only missed one. Even if they had made theirs too, Penn State would have won the game by one point or at least had the chance for overtime. Time ran out as Michigan scored the winning points so they did not have to kick the extra point.
Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that in fact the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference is the only conference with instant replay (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before the instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down.
The biggest factor in the loss was the addition of two seconds onto the clock after Michigan called time out. Michigan coach Lloyd Carr stormed over to the side judge and started giving him a mouth full. As a result the head official came over and discussed with him the point at which the time out was called. Whether or not his talking to the official had anything to do with the time change or not we will never know. However, as a result, two seconds was added to the clock. The play Michigan ran before the winning score stopped the clock with one second left, a second they was added for the time out discrepancy. Without the two added seconds the game would have been over right there and then, as no time would have remained on the clock for another play. Game over.
While some may say Penn State just was not good enough to beat Michigan, losing for the sixth straight year, it is clear that mistakes on the part of players and officials played a big part in the loss. Everyone always looks to blame someone else when things do not go the way they want. Referees are often the scapegoats and take a lot of criticism. In this case the criticism is clearly warranted and played a major role in determining the winner of the game. Referees are to play a minimal role and make the game fair for everyone involved. No wonder why Joe Paterno asked for instant replay.
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Football can come down to a game of inches to decide a victor. Inches short of a first down to continue a rallying drive; inches wide of the goal posts; inches from a receiver’s finger tips. But this game of inches is more than just that. Winning a game comes down to teamwork, heart, determination, talent, and the atmosphere. Teams are made and broke on these principles. Outside factors do exist and can be a big part of the outcome. Take for instance referees. They play a large role in the game and in the case of the Penn State versus Michigan played a huge role in determining the victor.
Several factors went into the Penn State loss. One factor was the two field goals Kevin Kelley missed after having had a flawless season to that point. That would have giving Penn State an extra six points and enough for the win. Michigan also had its field goals woes but they only missed one. Even if they had made theirs too, Penn State would have won the game by one point or at least had the chance for overtime. Time ran out as Michigan scored the winning points so they did not have to kick the extra point.
Perhaps only a minor and indirect cause of the loss was a long play ruled a catch by the side official. Chad Henne threw the ball to his receiver who appeared to come down in bounds making the reception. ABC replayed the play and discovered that in fact the receiver’s heel came down out of bounds nullifying the catch. The Big Ten Conference is the only conference with instant replay (which started with a disgruntled Joe Paterno). On Penn State’s drive not two minutes before the instant replay was used to overturn a catch that was ruled complete on the field by the officials. This beds the question, “Why not use it for this catch?” There was enough evidence to overturn the call, which would have negated a long and costly gain by Michigan forcing Michigan to run another play to gain a first down.
The biggest factor in the loss was the addition of two seconds onto the clock after Michigan called time out. Michigan coach Lloyd Carr stormed over to the side judge and started giving him a mouth full. As a result the head official came over and discussed with him the point at which the time out was called. Whether or not his talking to the official had anything to do with the time change or not we will never know. However, as a result, two seconds was added to the clock. The play Michigan ran before the winning score stopped the clock with one second left, a second they was added for the time out discrepancy. Without the two added seconds the game would have been over right there and then, as no time would have remained on the clock for another play. Game over.
While some may say Penn State just was not good enough to beat Michigan, losing for the sixth straight year, it is clear that mistakes on the part of players and officials played a big part in the loss. Everyone always looks to blame someone else when things do not go the way they want. Referees are often the scapegoats and take a lot of criticism. In this case the criticism is clearly warranted and played a major role in determining the winner of the game. Referees are to play a minimal role and make the game fair for everyone involved. No wonder why Joe Paterno asked for instant replay.