Most recent edit on 2005-10-02 20:28:57 by EschaTon
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Diversity is present in all colleges across the United States. This definitely serves [proves] true at the University Park campus of the Penn[sylvania] State University. Naturally, this is because a vast collection of people come together to live and learn within the same environment. But how does one truly define diversity? Wikipedia states that “the term diversity refers to the presence in one population of a wide variety of cultures, opinions, ethnic groups, socio-economic backgrounds, and so on.” Every person within the student populous contributes their unique experiences and backgrounds into Penn State’s culture and atmosphere in order to create one single, diverse community.
The variance of people residing at University Park is clearly apparent when studying the campus’ ethnical statistics. Though whites may have obviously dominated the 2004 enrollment roster, a minority list of 5,129 African Americans, Asian Americans, Hispanic Americans, and Native Americans, were still strongly present. Coinciding with that of the 3,204 other international students who attended that year, representation from several different backgrounds and cultures were carried within that wide array of ethnicities [This sentence is really confusing. What are you trying to say here?]. Also, an even smaller realm inside of that category is each student’s individual childhood and family upbringings. Though they may be uncannily similar at times, no two people were raised identically by their parents/guardians or lived in the same exact locations at the same given times. The difference between being a Pennsylvania[n] or Out-of-State citizen holds enough relevance alone. Experiences fall under that theme, as well. With incidents and sequence[s] of events differing from person to person, no pair or grouping of individuals has grown up under identical circumstances. Not even siblings that simultaneously attend this campus have experienced the exact same past prior to attending Penn State.
With this divergent past unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering over certain topics, such as whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team or whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There also exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents [independents aren't a party (except in Firefly∞)] or other less popular parties. Even yet[Further], individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This applies to the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of their peers [watch your language here, especially "normal" (even in scare quotes) and "incompetence"]. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
[First off, the conclusion to this paper is exceptionally weak. You talk about the many, different, possible defintions for a term like "diversity" yet you only mention one in your paper (and, actually, your paper is really an argument as to why this definition works in the context of the University). Other than that, this paper is fine. Some inconsistent grammar and confusing sentence structure mare the overall legibility of the paper. Also, atch out for loaded language when discussing hot topic, identity groups (here, the disabled). It can make your paper go in strage ways you may not have intended or reveal things to your readers you may not actually feel (I realize I just made an argument for political correctness (ugh), but just be wary of such terms).]
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Diversity is present in all colleges across the United States. This definitely serves true at the University Park campus of the Penn State University. Naturally, this is because a vast collection of people come together to live and learn within the same environment. But how does one truly define diversity? Wikipedia states that “the term diversity refers to the presence in one population of a wide variety of cultures, opinions, ethnic groups, socio-economic backgrounds, and so on.” Every person within the student populous contributes their unique experiences and backgrounds into Penn State’s culture and atmosphere in order to create one single, diverse community.
The variance of people residing at University Park is clearly apparent when studying the campus’ ethnical statistics. Though whites may have obviously dominated the 2004 enrollment roster, a minority list of 5,129 African Americans, Asian Americans, Hispanic Americans, and Native Americans, were still strongly present. Coinciding with that of the 3,204 other international students who attended that year, representation from several different backgrounds and cultures were carried within that wide array of ethnicities. Also, an even smaller realm inside of that category is each student’s individual childhood and family upbringings. Though they may be uncannily similar at times, no two people were raised identically by their parents/guardians or lived in the same exact locations at the same given times. The difference between being a Pennsylvania or Out-of-State citizen holds enough relevance alone. Experiences fall under that theme, as well. With incidents and sequence of events differing from person to person, no pair or grouping of individuals has grown up under identical circumstances. Not even siblings that simultaneously attend this campus have experienced the exact same past prior to attending Penn State.
With this divergent past unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering over certain topics, such as whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team or whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There also exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents or other less popular parties. Even yet, individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This applies to the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of their peers. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
Edited on 2005-09-22 15:51:25 by DragonfireBlog
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With this divergent past unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering over certain topics, such as whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team or whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There also exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents or other less popular parties. Even yet, individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This applies to the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of their peers. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
Overall, the formal definition of diversity is somewhat broad and can be found only within various shades of grey. The macro scale of it all is almost mind-numbing and infinite when contemplated and compared in all the possible ways that people may differ. Unfortunately, there is no black and white statement portraying what it clearly is and what it is not. Whatever the case, it is definitely apparent that Penn State fosters any and all meaning that the word “diversity” may undertake. When it comes down to it, diversity simply is a collection of several different persons contributing their past experiences and individuality into one concentrated group. In the end, the ultimate affect of diversity results in bringing people closer together as they bond over their differences.
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With this divergent past, unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering over certain topics, such as whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team and whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There also exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents and other less popular parties. Even yet, individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and has already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This applies to the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of their peers. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
Overall, the formal definition of diversity is somewhat broad and can be found only within various shades of grey. The macro scale of it all is almost mind-numbing and infinite when contemplated and compared in all the possible ways that people may differ. Unfortunately, there is no black and white statement portraying what it clearly is and what it is not. Whatever the case, it is definitely apparent that Penn State fosters any and all meaning that the word “diversity” may undertake. When it comes down to it, diversity simply is a collection of several different persons contributing their past experiences and individuality into one concentrated group. In the end, the ultimate affect of diversity results in bringing people closer together, rather than simply separating them as individuals.
Edited on 2005-09-19 10:40:40 by DragonfireDefinitionArguement
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“Enrollment by Ethnic Category.” University Budget Office. 18 September 2005. <http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/StudentDynamic/MinorityEnrolbyEthnicity.asp∞>
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“Enrollment by Ethnic Category.” University Budget Office. 18 September 2005. <http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/Student2000/EnrolbyEthnicitySummary.asp∞>
Edited on 2005-09-19 10:36:49 by DragonfireDefinitionArguement
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The variance of people residing at University Park is clearly apparent when studying the campus’ ethnical statistics. Though whites may have obviously dominated the 2004 enrollment roster, a minority list of 5,129 African Americans, Asian Americans, Hispanic Americans, and Native Americans, were still strongly present. Coinciding with that of the 3,204 other international students who attended that year, representation from several different backgrounds and cultures were carried within that wide array of ethnicities. Also, an even smaller realm inside of that category is each student’s individual childhood and family upbringings. Though they may be uncannily similar at times, no two people were raised identically by their parents/guardians or lived in the same exact locations at the same given times. The difference between being a Pennsylvania or Out-of-State citizen holds enough relevance alone. Experiences fall under that theme, as well. With incidents and sequence of events differing from person to person, no pair or grouping of individuals has grown up under identical circumstances. Not even siblings that simultaneously attend this campus have experienced the exact same past prior to attending Penn State.
With this divergent past, unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering over certain topics, such as whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team and whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There also exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents and other less popular parties. Even yet, individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and has already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This applies to the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of their peers. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
Overall, the formal definition of diversity is somewhat broad and can be found only within various shades of grey. The macro scale of it all is almost mind-numbing and infinite when contemplated and compared in all the possible ways that people may differ. Unfortunately, there is no black and white statement portraying what it clearly is and what it is not. Whatever the case, it is definitely apparent that Penn State fosters any and all meaning that the word “diversity” may undertake. When it comes down to it, diversity simply is a collection of several different persons contributing their past experiences and individuality into one concentrated group. In the end, the ultimate affect of diversity results in bringing people closer together, rather than simply separating them as individuals.
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The variance of people residing at University Park is clearly apparent when studying the campus’ ethnical statistics. Though whites may have obviously dominated the 2004 enrollment roster, a minority list of 5,129 African Americans, Asian Americans, Hispanic Americans, and Native Americans, were still strongly present. Coinciding with that of the 3,204 other international students who attended that year, representation from several different backgrounds and cultures were carried within that wide array of ethnicities. Also, an even smaller realm inside that category is each student’s individual childhood and family upbringings. Though they may be uncannily similar at times, no two people were raised identically by their parents/guardians or lived in the same exact locations at the same given times. The difference between being a Pennsylvania or Out of State citizen holds enough relevance alone. Experiences fall under that theme, as well. With incidents and sequence of events differing from person to person, no pair or grouping of individuals has grown up under identical circumstances. Not even siblings that simultaneously attend this campus have experienced the exact same past prior to attending Penn State.
With this divergent past, unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering between whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team and whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents and other less popular parties. Even yet, individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and has already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This goes for the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of the other students. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
Overall, the formal definition of diversity is somewhat broad and can be found only within various shades of grey. The macro scale of it all is almost mind-numbing and infinite when contemplated and compared in all the possible ways that people may differ. Unfortunately, there is no black and white statement portraying what it clearly is and what it is not. Whatever the case, it is definitely apparent that Penn State fosters any and all meaning that the word “diversity” may undertake. When it comes down to it, diversity simply is a collection of several different persons contributing their past experiences and individuality into one concentrated group. In the end, the ultimate affect of diversity results in bringing people closer together than simply separating them as individuals.
Edited on 2005-09-19 10:24:29 by DragonfireDefinitionArguement
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Diversity at Penn State
Diversity is present in all colleges across the United States. This definitely serves true at the University Park campus of the Penn State University. Naturally, this is because a vast collection of people come together to live and learn within the same environment. But how does one truly define diversity? Wikipedia states that “the term diversity refers to the presence in one population of a wide variety of cultures, opinions, ethnic groups, socio-economic backgrounds, and so on.” Every person within the student populous contributes their unique experiences and backgrounds into Penn State’s culture and atmosphere in order to create one single, diverse community.
Other contributing factors that help to make up Penn State’s diversity include age, gender, handicaps and sexual orientation. A newly-arriving freshman who is eighteen years old is usually less mature, lacks the experience, and sometimes is not as wise as a senior who has worked through all four years of college and has already experienced twenty-two years of life. According to gender, studies have proven that girls mature faster than boys, and on average, a girl’s psyche generally acts as if hers is three years older than a boy’s, even though they are physically the same age. This means that two people of opposite gender, of the same age, and going into the same semester may have extremely different logic and thinking. This goes for the handicap as well. Mental and physical incompetence may slow development and require a slower, simpler approach to educational learning. Disabled students may have to strive and work harder than others who are “normal” and on a same level as most of the other students. These and many other factors just help to shape the individuality of everyone within University Park.
Overall, the formal definition of diversity is somewhat broad and can be found only within various shades of grey. The macro scale of it all is almost mind-numbing and infinite when contemplated and compared in all the possible ways that people may differ. Unfortunately, there is no black and white statement portraying what it clearly is and what it is not. Whatever the case, it is definitely apparent that Penn State fosters any and all meaning that the word “diversity” may undertake. When it comes down to it, diversity simply is a collection of several different persons contributing their past experiences and individuality into one concentrated group. In the end, the ultimate affect of diversity results in bringing people closer together than simply separating them as individuals.
Work Cited
“Diversity.” Wikipedia. 18 September 2005. < http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Diversity∞>
“Enrollment by Ethnic Category.” University Budget Office. 18 September 2005. <http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/Student2000/EnrolbyEthnicitySummary.asp∞>
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Diversity is present in all colleges across the United States. This definitely serves true at the University Park campus of Penn State. Naturally, this is because a vast collection of people come together to live and learn within the same environment. But how does one truly define diversity? Wikipedia states that “the term diversity refers to the presence in one population of a wide variety of cultures, opinions, ethnic groups, socio-economic backgrounds, and so on.” Every person within the student populous contributes their unique experiences and backgrounds into Penn State’s culture and atmosphere in order to create one single, diverse community.
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Diversity is present in all colleges across the United States. This definitely serves true at the University Park campus of Penn State. Naturally, this is because a vast collection of people come together to live and learn within the same environment. But how does one truly define diversity? Wikipedia states that “the term diversity refers to the presence in one population of a wide variety of cultures, opinions, ethnic groups, socio-economic backgrounds, and so on.” Every person within the student populous contributes their unique experiences and backgrounds into Penn State’s culture and atmosphere in order to create one single, diverse community.
The variance of people residing at University Park is clearly apparent when studying the campus’ ethnical statistics. Though whites may have obviously dominated the 2004 enrollment roster, a minority list of 5,129 African Americans, Asian Americans, Hispanic Americans, and Native Americans, were still strongly present. Coinciding with that of the 3,204 other international students who attended that year, representation from several different backgrounds and cultures were carried within that wide array of ethnicities. Also, an even smaller realm inside that category is each student’s individual childhood and family upbringings. Though they may be uncannily similar at times, no two people were raised identically by their parents/guardians or lived in the same exact locations at the same given times. The difference between being a Pennsylvania or Out of State citizen holds enough relevance alone. Experiences fall under that theme, as well. With incidents and sequence of events differing from person to person, no pair or grouping of individuals has grown up under identical circumstances. Not even siblings that simultaneously attend this campus have experienced the exact same past prior to attending Penn State.
With this divergent past, unique to each student, it is only natural that a variable amount of thoughts and opinions can be noticed. One major difference, for example, is that of the mindsets of residents from the two opposite sides of Pennsylvania. This is apparent through the ongoing bickering between whether the Pittsburgh Steelers or Philadelphia Eagles are the better team and whether a carbonated beverage is labeled either “soda” or “pop”. There exists no strong majority in political views between those who are Republican and those who take on Democratic ideals. Many even drift away from the common “right wing” and “left wing” views and are avid supporters of the Independents and other less popular parties. Even yet, individual’s opinions within a certain political party sometimes do not match entirely, either. Every mindset and ideal seems to be well-represented to some degree. No two minds think alike, and that is especially true at this college.