When a naive teen[s] makes that big step from a small high school to a [B]ig [T]en university, they enter a whole new world of differences [watch out for parallelism problems]. In high school, all the students are from the same town, speak the same language and support the same team. Whereas in college, everyone, consisting of students and staff, are from all over the country[,] even across seas. With such a large incoming freshman class, all from different backgrounds and having unique and individual interests, a university must be open to such diversity,[.] [I]n fact, [it must] welcome it. [I think this should be another sentence. It will make your intent clear]

The term, "diversity," carries many connotations. Wikipedia gives a well put definition that applies to this [what? don't use "this" without clarifying; esp. here, because I have no idea to what "this" refers in this sentence] specifically: "[d]iversity is the presence of a wide range of variation in the qualities or attributes under discussion" (wikipedia, par. 1), in this case a university. Amongst humans, college students, particularly in a social context, college, the term diversity refers to the presence in one population of a wide variety of cultures opinions, ethnic groups, socio-economic backgrounds and so on (wikipedia, par. 2). When different opinions are presented, they are not always accepted and therefore cause conflict. A good example of a very diverse campus is Penn State University [why?]. The meaning of the word diverse changes though, and has different forms depending on the point in which the things differ [you should get rid of this sent.]. Penn State is that point where things differ and therefore needing its own definition of diversity [I have no idea what this sentence is saying]. Through the conflicts present at Penn State[,] including sports, majors and nationality, a concrete definition of diversity will be formed specifically for, Penn State University.

In every sport, two teams from two cities meet at one place, and play against one another. [First off, this sent. serves no purpose in your paragraph. It is a generalization. Second, it isn't even a true generalization: what about, for instance, track meets?] The result usually ending in someone having to win and the other having to lose [Did you proofread this paper?]. Sports are specifically designed for the enjoyment of the players but primarily for the fans [huh?]. It is a social activity and a conversation starter, almost always resulting in a heated debate on who is better. People support the team from their hometown whether they win or lose and despise all other opponents [generalizations. I, for instance, don't give two hoots about the Braves or the Falcons, but that is part of living in Atlanta. In other words, watch out for making such statements]. At Penn State, the majority of the student population is split down the middle, half from Philadelphia and the other from Pittsburgh. These are both big cities with their own NFL teams. The Pittsburgh Steelers and the Philadelphia Eagles have long been rivals because they are both from the state of Pennsylvania, fighting to be named the best team in the state [There are so many more ways to say this in a more concise fashion. The history of sports in this country that you sketch out in the opening of this paragraph has nothing to do with the point you are trying to make in this paragraph or the larger thesis of this paper. A lot of your peers used the Steelers/Eagles example in there paper. Take a look at how others worked this into their essays]. Both teams have very "dedicated" [why is this in quotes?] fans and will make sure everyone knows it. This diversity in sports causes a conflict between the students. Randomly, a group will start chanting either, “E-A-G-L-E-S EAGLES!” or “Here we go Steelers, here we go!” The assumption would be that they want to show their support for their team. Very often however, it is because they want to start up a heated debate (blogs) [is this a citation? because that's not how you cite something. Reading on, I see what you are trying to do here. You can't cite something as broad as our collection of class blogs to make a point. Cite some specific examples or compile some statistics. For instance, say "in the first 4 weeks of class, there were X entries about Eagles/Steelers ..."]. For example, I was sitting in my math class last week and I noticed a fellow classmate in the row in front of me stepping over others to get to one of the last open seats. Before he sat down, he noticed the boy next to him was wearing a Steelers jersey and refused to sit next to him. My classmates primary concern was not where he sat in the class but rather which football fan he sat next to. Disputes over the two NFL teams is only one type of diversity that exists between the students at Penn State. Although sometimes it causes trouble, it can be a good thing. It is exciting and fun to support your own team that represents your home town, especially when you are away from home. Everyone still has and always will have one thing in common: the pride and dignity of being a Penn State football fan. [This paragraph has very little to do with defining diversity. While talking about Eagles/Steelers is fun, I don't think it serves any purpose in advancing your thesis]

The purpose of college is to further one[']s education in a specific field to successfully receive a job and make a living. A university provides its students with a variety of majors that one will be able to choose from to receive a degree. There has to be enough majors in order to satisfy the great diversity of interests and talents [does there? why?]. Penn State University offers 160 baccalaureate (4 year) degree majors and 21 associate (2 year) degree majors ([B]udget). Throughout these majors, the entire student body is divided up. ["The student body is divided up between these majors" is the more concise way of stating this, but, honestly, you don't need this sentence. Of course the student body is going to be divided up amongst the majors. That's what students do. If you have something interesting related to the distribution of majors, then through this sent. back in] The students who belong to a certain major will most often take the same classes, join the same clubs, and participate in the same activities as other students in that same major [you have proof of this?]. They become connected with the other students they are constantly around all the time [the "all the time" is redundent]. Commonly, these people who share the same major "click" because they also share this same interest [again, do you have proof of this?]. A specific major chosen by a student is another example of diversity at Penn State. It does divide the student body, but there are many activities one can be involved in that allows the interaction with other students. In the end, although having different degrees, they all graduate from the same school: Penn State University [these last couple of sent. does an excelent job of making your point.].

One[']s race/nationality is a big part of Penn State's diversity. Out of the 40,571 students enrolled at Penn Sates University Park Campus, 4,646 are a member of a minority, 33,211 are Caucasian, and 2,711 are international students (budget). When people come from different backgrounds they tend to have different opinions of ideas and subjects because of the way they have been brought up or raised. In each of the different majors, you will find a diversity of ethnicities. This can have both a good and bad affect among the students. Different views or new ideas can be presented and enlighten students but they can also cause conflicts. Diversity can be broken down into categories as simple as gender, color of hair, or even the style of clothes you wear. Diversity will always exist in society. [Do you have anything to add about the fact that the number of minorities in the Penn State body is a lot lower than the national population as a whole?]

Students transitioning from high school to college will always be exposed to different types of diversity, everywhere they go. They will be presented with various opinions that they may or may not agree with, which could eventually end in conflict[, b]ut what is a world without conflict? Everything needs some sort of variation, otherwise the world would be boring. Diversity is not a bad thing. It actually is a positive aspect of society. It opens each student[']s minds up to different styles and passions. Penn State is a very diverse campus. It includes a wide range of students who support different football teams, receive a degree in different majors, and have different backgrounds or ethnicities. Based on these three examples, I firmly believe that Penn States is the true definition of diversity. There are many dictionary meanings for the word and this university meets them all [hmm ... that is another generalization]. Penn State is the ultimate diversity with all the students and staff uniting their individual backgrounds, bringing with them a set of opinions and thoughts all their own. Despite all these differences, the students will always have one thing in common, that they are a proud student at Penn State University!