Most recent edit on 2005-09-26 14:57:03 by EschaTon
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· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.” (Developing a Shared and Inclusive Understanding of Diversity)
[If this is the citation, it should be on the same line of the blockquote, to indicate what it si. Also, you should indent these bullet points, as they are what is called a "blockquote"]
[Overall, this is a great argument brought down by some shody sentence construction. The paragraph were you dismantle the points of the Penn State definition is an excellent example of rhetorical technique, but awkward wording and sentence structure often confuses the point for the reader. Also, you should talk more in class, you express some very interesting ideas in this paper.]
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· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.” (Developing a Shared and Inclusive Understanding of Diversity) [If this is the citation, it should be on the same line of the blockquote, to indicate what it si. Also, you should indent these bullet points, as they are what is called a "blockquote"]
[Overall, this is a great argument brought down by some shody sentence construction. The paragraph were dismantle the points of the Penn State definition is an excellent example of rhetorical technique, but awkward wording and sentence structure often confuses the point for the reader. Also, you should talk more in class, you express some very interesting ideas in this paper.]
Can diversity be clearly defined? Apparently Penn State thinks it can be defined even though, in itself, the word “diverse” is quite diverse. Penn State strives to come up with the ultimate definition for diversity and has been revising its own definition of the word for decades. According to Penn State, the word diversity currently encompasses a population that includes:
· “Reasonable representation from different minority groups
· Representation from different countries and cultures
· Reasonable balance of gender
· Diversity in curriculum content
· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.”
(Developing a Shared and Inclusive Understanding of Diversity)
It is evident that the term is very loosely defined by Penn State because their definition includes the words “reasonable” and “diversity;” the word “reasonable” is also a very loosely defined word, because something that “reasonable” is subjective to opinion. Part of their definition uses the word they are trying to define. Therefore, their definition basically runs around in circles.
First of all, I believe opinions can create more diversity than anything. Opinions constantly define who we are and what we think and believe, and they vary more than any race, gender, curriculum content, religious and political beliefs, sexual orientation, etcetera. The basis of our opinions often comes from our backgrounds, experiences, and current surroundings. These opinions are, in the end, what we as human beings base pretty much all of our knowledge on, and this knowledge is used to create definitions. These definitions define words like diversity, which Penn State is trying to define.
The first three statements in their definition of diversity all primarily deal with representation from different groups. The groups comprising a diverse society here at Penn State are minorities, different countries and cultures, and gender. Here at Penn State, racial minorities make up less than one fourth of the population, and student representatives from different countries make up only seven percent of the population. The Penn State Fact Book provides us with a look at those numbers, and since it is the University’s data, it is very probable that the data is correct in depicting the numbers. Although the numbers of representatives from the previous groups are small in comparison to the white population here on campus, one could say they are “reasonable” due to the amount of different groups being represented in the statistics, but that takes us back to the argument of “what is reasonable?” an argument that is solely based on opinion.
Even though the population diversity, in numbers at least, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (Penn State Undergraduate Admissions.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University) The amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content, and although they do this, I feel their usage of the word diverse to define diversity is kind of redundant.
Finally, the last statement in Penn State’s definition of diversity promotes a climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures. Penn State clearly tries to promote diversity, and by doing so, they kind of enforce a set of rules by which we students are supposed to live by. This set of rules is called the “Penn State Principles,” which was created in 2001. The first of these “Principles” states, “I will respect the dignity of all individuals within the Penn State Community.” (Penn State Principles) The previous statement entails everything a student is supposed to do in order to be tolerant of this diversity that exists on campus. This tolerance, which is supposed to be accepted when we recognize these principles, practiced by the students should at last succeed in promoting a climate that is supportive of different groups.
Ultimately, I believe Penn State has yet to precisely define a word such as diversity solely on the basis that the word in itself is quite broad, and I believe that their definition should involve more than the five points they stated create diversity. Their definition should be broader and shouldn’t have been summed up in five simple statements. Sure, the statements they made in their definition promote a sense of diversity, but they try to confine a word that deals with differences and the broadness of people to a few simple statements.
Works Cited
“Penn State Undergraduate Admissions.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University." http://www.psu.edu/admissions/steps/choosing/majors.htm∞
Edited on 2005-09-26 14:56:11 by EschaTon
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Can diversity be clearly defined? Penn State thinks it can be. Popular opinion says it can’t be. Even though the [meaning of the] word “diverse” is quite diverse, Penn State strives to come up with the ultimate definition for diversity and has been revising its own definition of the word for decades. According to Penn State, the word diversity currently encompasses a population that includes:
· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.” (Developing a Shared and Inclusive Understanding of Diversity) [If this is the citation, it should be on the same line of the blockquote, to indicate what it si. Also, you should indent these bullet points, as they are what is called a "blockquote"]
This evidence shows that the term is very loosely defined by Penn State because their definition includes the words “reasonable” and “diversity;” the word “reasonable” is also a very loosely defined word, because something that is “reasonable” is subjective to opinion. Part of their definition uses the word they are trying to define. Therefore, their definition basically runs around in circles and is really only based on opinion [definitions that define things in terms of themselves are called "tautologies"].
First of all, I believe opinions create more diversity than anything [above all else]. Opinions constantly define who we are and what we think and believe, and they vary more than any race, gender, curriculum content, religious and political beliefs, sexual orientation, etc. The basis of our opinions often comes from our backgrounds, experiences, and current surroundings. These opinions are, in the end, what we as human beings base pretty much all of our knowledge on, and this knowledge is used to create definitions. These definitions define words like diversity, which Penn State is trying to define. [oh god ... talk about sentences that loop back on themselves =)]
The first three statements in their definition of diversity all primarily deal with representation from different groups. The groups comprising a diverse society here at Penn State are minorities, different countries and cultures, and gender; and the[se] groups all more than likely have different opinions on the state of diversity at Penn State. The Penn State Fact Book provides us with a look at the makeup of student population. Here at Penn State, racial minorities make up less than one fourth of the population, and student representatives from different countries make up only seven percent of the population. Although the numbers of representatives from the previous groups are small in comparison to the white population here on campus, one could say they are “reasonable” due to the amount of different groups being represented in the statistics, but that takes us back to the argument of “what is reasonable?” [loose definition of "reasonable", ] an argument that is solely based on opinion.
Even though the population diversity, in numbers, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that [as] Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (Penn State Undergraduate Admissions) This[e] vast amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content. This diversity in course curriculum and major choices allows a student to explore his opinions, which also creates a sense of diversity, and also an understanding of it, [this phrase is confusing and should be removed] on campus.
Ultimately, I believe Penn State has yet to precisely define a word such as diversity because the word in itself is quite broad; so, their definition should be broader and shouldn’t have been summed up in five simple statements. It should also have more emphasis on one’s opinion[,] because opinion is the main factor in what creates[ing] diversity; and[. E]ven though, the statements they make in their definition promote a sense of diversity, they [Penn State's Diversity Office (or whoever it was that wrote that definition] try to confine a word that deals with differences and the broadness of people to a few simple statements.
[Overall, this is a great argument brought down by some shody sentence construction. The paragraph were dismantle the points of the Penn State definition is an excellent example of rhetorical technique, but awkward wording and sentence structure often confuses the point for the reader. Also, you should talk more in class, you express some very interesting ideas in this paper.]
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Can diversity be clearly defined? Penn State thinks it can be. Popular opinion says it can’t be. Even though the word “diverse” is quite diverse, Penn State strives to come up with the ultimate definition for diversity and has been revising its own definition of the word for decades. According to Penn State, the word diversity currently encompasses a population that includes:
· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.”
This evidence shows that the term is very loosely defined by Penn State because their definition includes the words “reasonable” and “diversity;” the word “reasonable” is also a very loosely defined word, because something that is “reasonable” is subjective to opinion. Part of their definition uses the word they are trying to define. Therefore, their definition basically runs around in circles and is really only based on opinion.
First of all, I believe opinions create more diversity than anything. Opinions constantly define who we are and what we think and believe, and they vary more than any race, gender, curriculum content, religious and political beliefs, sexual orientation, etc. The basis of our opinions often comes from our backgrounds, experiences, and current surroundings. These opinions are, in the end, what we as human beings base pretty much all of our knowledge on, and this knowledge is used to create definitions. These definitions define words like diversity, which Penn State is trying to define.
The first three statements in their definition of diversity all primarily deal with representation from different groups. The groups comprising a diverse society here at Penn State are minorities, different countries and cultures, and gender; and the groups all more than likely have different opinions on the state of diversity at Penn State. The Penn State Fact Book provides us with a look at the makeup of student population. Here at Penn State, racial minorities make up less than one fourth of the population, and student representatives from different countries make up only seven percent of the population. Although the numbers of representatives from the previous groups are small in comparison to the white population here on campus, one could say they are “reasonable” due to the amount of different groups being represented in the statistics, but that takes us back to the argument of “what is reasonable?” an argument that is solely based on opinion.
Even though the population diversity, in numbers, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (Penn State Undergraduate Admissions) This vast amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content. This diversity in course curriculum and major choices allows a student to explore his opinions, which also creates a sense of diversity, and also an understanding of it, on campus.
Ultimately, I believe Penn State has yet to precisely define a word such as diversity because the word in itself is quite broad; so, their definition should be broader and shouldn’t have been summed up in five simple statements. It should also have more emphasis on one’s opinion because opinion is the main factor in what creates diversity; and even though, the statements they make in their definition promote a sense of diversity, they try to confine a word that deals with differences and the broadness of people to a few simple statements.
Edited on 2005-09-26 14:27:59 by EschaTon
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· “Reasonable representation from different minority groups
· Representation from different countries and cultures
· Reasonable balance of gender
· Diversity in curriculum content
· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.”
Edited on 2005-09-23 09:57:49 by MenosElOso
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Works Cited
Edited on 2005-09-23 01:02:10 by MenosElOso
Additions:
Remixed Definition Argument:
Can diversity be clearly defined? Penn State thinks it can be. Popular opinion says it can’t be. Even though the word “diverse” is quite diverse, Penn State strives to come up with the ultimate definition for diversity and has been revising its own definition of the word for decades. According to Penn State, the word diversity currently encompasses a population that includes:
This evidence shows that the term is very loosely defined by Penn State because their definition includes the words “reasonable” and “diversity;” the word “reasonable” is also a very loosely defined word, because something that is “reasonable” is subjective to opinion. Part of their definition uses the word they are trying to define. Therefore, their definition basically runs around in circles and is really only based on opinion.
First of all, I believe opinions create more diversity than anything. Opinions constantly define who we are and what we think and believe, and they vary more than any race, gender, curriculum content, religious and political beliefs, sexual orientation, etc. The basis of our opinions often comes from our backgrounds, experiences, and current surroundings. These opinions are, in the end, what we as human beings base pretty much all of our knowledge on, and this knowledge is used to create definitions. These definitions define words like diversity, which Penn State is trying to define.
The first three statements in their definition of diversity all primarily deal with representation from different groups. The groups comprising a diverse society here at Penn State are minorities, different countries and cultures, and gender; and the groups all more than likely have different opinions on the state of diversity at Penn State. The Penn State Fact Book provides us with a look at the makeup of student population. Here at Penn State, racial minorities make up less than one fourth of the population, and student representatives from different countries make up only seven percent of the population. Although the numbers of representatives from the previous groups are small in comparison to the white population here on campus, one could say they are “reasonable” due to the amount of different groups being represented in the statistics, but that takes us back to the argument of “what is reasonable?” an argument that is solely based on opinion.
Even though the population diversity, in numbers, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (Penn State Undergraduate Admissions) This vast amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content. This diversity in course curriculum and major choices allows a student to explore his opinions, which also creates a sense of diversity, and also an understanding of it, on campus.
Finally, the last statement in Penn State’s definition of diversity promotes a climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures. In 2001, Penn State created a set of rules to promote diversity called the “Penn State Principles.” The first of these “Principles” states, “I will respect the dignity of all individuals within the Penn State Community.” (Penn State Principles) By respecting the dignity of the individual, one learns to be tolerant of this diversity that exists on campus. This tolerance, which is supposed to be accepted when we recognize these principles, practiced by the students should at last succeed in promoting a climate that is supportive of different groups. Therefore, as students, we must tolerate people’s opinions because an individual’s dignity often comes from his opinion.
Ultimately, I believe Penn State has yet to precisely define a word such as diversity because the word in itself is quite broad; so, their definition should be broader and shouldn’t have been summed up in five simple statements. It should also have more emphasis on one’s opinion because opinion is the main factor in what creates diversity; and even though, the statements they make in their definition promote a sense of diversity, they try to confine a word that deals with differences and the broadness of people to a few simple statements.
Edited on 2005-09-19 09:21:32 by MenosElOso
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(Developing a Shared and Inclusive Understanding of Diversity)
Even though the population diversity, in numbers at least, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (Penn State Undergraduate Admissions.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University) The amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content, and although they do this, I feel their usage of the word diverse to define diversity is kind of redundant.
“Penn State Undergraduate Admissions.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University." http://www.psu.edu/admissions/steps/choosing/majors.htm∞
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(http://www.equity.psu.edu/paradigm/dev_diversity.pdf∞)
Even though the population diversity, in numbers at least, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (http://www.psu.edu/admissions/steps/choosing/majors.htm∞) The amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content, and although they do this, I feel their usage of the word diverse to define diversity is kind of redundant.
“Penn State Undergraduate Admissions.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University. http://www.psu.edu/admissions/steps/choosing/majors.htm∞
Edited on 2005-09-19 00:33:55 by MenosElOso
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“Penn State Principles.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University. http://www.psu.edu/ur/principles.pdf∞
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“Penn State Principles.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University. www.psu.edu/ur/principles.pdf
Edited on 2005-09-18 22:00:25 by MenosElOso
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Works Cited
“Developing a Shared and Inclusive Understanding of Diversity.” 2005. Office of the Vice Provost for Educational Equity. http://www.equity.psu.edu/paradigm/dev_diversity.pdf∞
“Penn State Undergraduate Admissions.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University. http://www.psu.edu/admissions/steps/choosing/majors.htm∞
“Penn State Principles.” 2005. The Pennsylvania State University. www.psu.edu/ur/principles.pdf
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Can diversity be clearly defined? Apparently Penn State thinks it can be defined even though, in itself, the word “diverse” is quite diverse. Penn State strives to come up with the ultimate definition for diversity and has been revising its own definition of the word for decades. According to Penn State, the word diversity currently encompasses a population that includes:
· “Reasonable representation from different minority groups
· Representation from different countries and cultures
· Reasonable balance of gender
· Diversity in curriculum content
· Climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures.”
(
http://www.equity.psu.edu/paradigm/dev_diversity.pdf∞)
It is evident that the term is very loosely defined by Penn State because their definition includes the words “reasonable” and “diversity;” the word “reasonable” is also a very loosely defined word, because something that “reasonable” is subjective to opinion. Part of their definition uses the word they are trying to define. Therefore, their definition basically runs around in circles.
First of all, I believe opinions can create more diversity than anything. Opinions constantly define who we are and what we think and believe, and they vary more than any race, gender, curriculum content, religious and political beliefs, sexual orientation, etcetera. The basis of our opinions often comes from our backgrounds, experiences, and current surroundings. These opinions are, in the end, what we as human beings base pretty much all of our knowledge on, and this knowledge is used to create definitions. These definitions define words like diversity, which Penn State is trying to define.
The first three statements in their definition of diversity all primarily deal with representation from different groups. The groups comprising a diverse society here at Penn State are minorities, different countries and cultures, and gender. Here at Penn State, racial minorities make up less than one fourth of the population, and student representatives from different countries make up only seven percent of the population. The Penn State Fact Book provides us with a look at those numbers, and since it is the University’s data, it is very probable that the data is correct in depicting the numbers. Although the numbers of representatives from the previous groups are small in comparison to the white population here on campus, one could say they are “reasonable” due to the amount of different groups being represented in the statistics, but that takes us back to the argument of “what is reasonable?” an argument that is solely based on opinion.
Even though the population diversity, in numbers at least, is small, the course curriculum content is extremely “diverse,” also in numbers, in the sense that Penn State offers over 160 baccalaureate majors. (
http://www.psu.edu/admissions/steps/choosing/majors.htm∞) The amount of majors offers a Penn State student a great deal of choices, and a student can choose a major in just about any type of field. Being able to choose a major in almost any field of study provides a sense of completeness and a real sense of being offered many options; thus, Penn State succeeds in clearly promoting diversity in course curriculum and content, and although they do this, I feel their usage of the word diverse to define diversity is kind of redundant.
Finally, the last statement in Penn State’s definition of diversity promotes a climate supportive of different minority groups and cultures. Penn State clearly tries to promote diversity, and by doing so, they kind of enforce a set of rules by which we students are supposed to live by. This set of rules is called the “Penn State Principles,” which was created in 2001. The first of these “Principles” states, “I will respect the dignity of all individuals within the Penn State Community.” (Penn State Principles) The previous statement entails everything a student is supposed to do in order to be tolerant of this diversity that exists on campus. This tolerance, which is supposed to be accepted when we recognize these principles, practiced by the students should at last succeed in promoting a climate that is supportive of different groups.
Ultimately, I believe Penn State has yet to precisely define a word such as diversity solely on the basis that the word in itself is quite broad, and I believe that their definition should involve more than the five points they stated create diversity. Their definition should be broader and shouldn’t have been summed up in five simple statements. Sure, the statements they made in their definition promote a sense of diversity, but they try to confine a word that deals with differences and the broadness of people to a few simple statements.