Most recent edit on 2005-10-01 16:20:03 by EschaTon
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Diversity is a unique word [hmm ... this sentence doesn't seem to make the point you want it to. What does "unique" mean? Why is it so unique?]. In Webster’s New World Dictionary, it defines diversity as variety, which seems vague. But what is variety? Is it random items grouped together so [that] everything is different? It [This definition?] does not seem that it is specific enough to give a true understanding [of whether] if Penn State is truly diverse. At Penn State, I feel that diversity should be defined in the matter of the students having different opinions and backgrounds. But, when considering ethnicity, we are not as diverse due to the fact that variety does not exist as well as Penn State preaches it to be. [These two sentences are a verbal minefield. Read them aloud. Do you have any idea what they mean?]
Diversity exists at Penn State through the student’s opinions [oh, I see what you were trying to talk about, above]. Every student here has different opinions about music, politics, sports teams, etc. which lead to conflict. The conflict does not have to be bad, but be a way for students to communicate and hear others opinions. Many people have eclectic tastes of [in] music and not everyone is going to like the same kind of music, whether it being classical, hip-hop, rap, punk, etc. Some people feel strongly about their music and will stand by it, no matter what. For example, when I tell people that I like bands such as Fall Out Boy or Taking Back Sunday, I have to defend myself, trying to explain that the music is not only about guys breaking up with their girlfriends and then writing about it. I want people to understand that I like that kind of music and everyone can have their own opinions. There are some people who will always disagree and enjoy other kinds of music[.] and [T]hat is one of the reasons why people are diverse. Politics is not one of the best topics to bring up at a dinner table here at Penn State[,] but many people have different parties in which they are associated with. Some support Bush and others do not, creating a problem within the community. Not everyone will agree with what is going on in the world and our government but everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. Sports are also a big issue here as well. The main sport here is football and besides our school, it seems that a lot of people either favor the Philadelphia Eagles, or the Pittsburgh Steelers. It seems that everywhere you go people will be against each other. It even happens in the classroom and the online blogs. Everyone at Penn State has different opinions about sports and it allows diversity to shine through. The diversity that Penn State displays is just another way to help people explore what is outside of their usual thinking and beliefs.
Another big reason why we are diverse here at Penn State is due to the fact that everyone here comes from different backgrounds. The majority of the students are from Pennsylvania but there are also students who come from across the country and even from the other side of the world. Some students have different lifestyles, whether they come from a suburb or a city. Some of the students, although being white, may speak another language at the household. For example, I am white but my heritage is Russian. At home, I speak Russian to most of my family members and when I tell that to most people, they find it to be very intriguing. Due to everyone’s backgrounds, it opens individuals up to how different people are from one another which allows one to still get along. [Do you have some statistics to support your claims about students coming from different backgrounds]
Although we are diverse through opinions and backgrounds, we lack diversity in ethnicity. But when I think about it, we are not as diverse here because the majority of Penn State students are white [What does this sentence even mean?]. Last year, 32,959 students out of a total of 41,289, were white and the others were made up of: African American, Asian American, Hispanic American, Native American, and International students (http://www.budget.psu.edu)∞∞. How can Penn State be considered diverse when approximately eighty percent of the students here are of the same ethnicity? When I researched Temple University, in Philadelphia, only sixty percent of the students there are white, which makes them more of a [more] diverse campus (http://www2.collegeboard.com)∞. It seems that Penn State is trying to make this campus seem like we are very diverse, but in the aspect of ethnicity, it does not come out true. Culturally, we are all the same, maybe differing in religion, but our backgrounds are almost alike. [This paragraph undercuts your previous definition of diversity. Is it opinions that make up diversity? Or is it ethnicity? Is Penn State diverse or not? You can't have it both ways]
Penn State should define diversity at Penn State as the student’s opinions and backgrounds. They should also try to include ethnicity when they actually improve their statistics [??]. But when race is considered more, we can then compare and contrast with one another, and realize diversity truly does exist at Penn State. [what?]
[This is extremely confusing. The sentences in this paper are pockets of confusion and the thesis as a whole seems to lack direction. Overall, I have no idea what this paper is attempting to argue and what it is trying to say.]
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Diversity exists at Penn State through the student’s opinions. Every student here has different opinions about music, politics, sports teams, etc. which lead to conflict. The conflict does not have to be bad, but be a way for students to communicate and hear others opinions. Many people have eclectic tastes of music and not everyone is going to like the same kind of music, whether it being classical, hip-hop, rap, punk, etc. Some people feel strongly about their music and will stand by it, no matter what. For example, when I tell people that I like bands such as Fall Out Boy or Taking Back Sunday, I have to defend myself, trying to explain that the music is not only about guys breaking up with their girlfriends and then writing about it. I want people to understand that I like that kind of music and everyone can have their own opinions. There are some people who will always disagree and enjoy other kinds of music and that is one of the reasons why people are diverse. Politics is not one of the best topics to bring up at a dinner table here at Penn State but many people have different parties in which they are associated with. Some support Bush and others do not, creating a problem within the community. Not everyone will agree with what is going on in the world and our government but everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. Sports are also a big issue here as well. The main sport here is football and besides our school, it seems that a lot of people either favor the Philadelphia Eagles, or the Pittsburgh Steelers. It seems that everywhere you go people will be against each other. It even happens in the classroom and the online blogs. Everyone at Penn State has different opinions about sports and it allows diversity to shine through. The diversity that Penn State displays is just another way to help people explore what is outside of their usual thinking and beliefs.
Edited on 2005-09-22 20:20:59 by MonicaKras
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Works Cited
University Budget Office. “Enrollment by Ethnicity.” http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/Student2000/EnrolbyEthnicitySummary.asp∞∞∞;
College Board. "Temple University." http://www2.collegeboard.com/search/CollegeDetail.jsp?collegeId=1409∞∞;
Works Cited
University Budget Office. “Enrollment by Ethnicity.” http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/Student2000/EnrolbyEthnicitySummary.asp∞∞∞;
College Board. "Temple University." http://www2.collegeboard.com/search/CollegeDetail.jsp?collegeId=1409∞∞;
Edited on 2005-09-22 20:19:31 by MonicaKras
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Edited on 2005-09-22 20:18:58 by MonicaKras
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Diversity exists at Penn State through the student’s opinions. Every student here has different opinions about music, politics, sports teams, etc. which lead to conflict. The conflict does not have to be bad, but be a way for students to communicate and hear others opinions. Many people have eclectic tastes of music and not everyone is going to like the same kind of music, whether it being classical, hip-hop, rap, punk, etc. Some people feel strongly about their music and will stand by it, no matter what. For example, when I tell people that I like bands such as Fall Out Boy or Taking Back Sunday, I have to defend myself, trying to explain that the music is not only about guys breaking up with their girlfriends and then writing about it. I want people to understand that I like that kind of music and everyone can have their own opinions. There are some people who will always disagree and enjoy other kinds of music and that is one of the reasons why people are diverse. Politics is not one of the best topics to bring up at a dinner table here at Penn State but many people have different parties in which they are associated with. Some support Bush and others do not, creating a problem within the community. Not everyone will agree with what is going on in the world and our government but everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. Sports are also a big issue here as well. The main sport here is football and besides our school, it seems that a lot of people either favor the Philadelphia Eagles, or the Pittsburgh Steelers. It seems that everywhere you go people will be against each other. It even happens in the classroom and the online blogs. Everyone at Penn State has different opinions about sports and it allows diversity to shine through. The diversity that Penn State displays is just another way to help people explore what is outside of their usual thinking and beliefs.
Edited on 2005-09-19 20:40:11 by MonicaKras
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Diversity is a unique word. In Webster’s New World Dictionary, it defines diversity as variety, which seems vague. But what is variety? Is it random items grouped together so everything is different? It does not seem that it is specific enough to give a true understanding if Penn State is truly diverse. At Penn State, I feel that diversity should be defined in the matter of the students having different opinions and backgrounds. But, when considering ethnicity, we are not as diverse due to the fact that variety does not exist as well as Penn State preaches it to be.
Diversity exists at Penn State through the student’s opinions. Every student here has different opinions about music, politics, sports teams, etc. which lead to conflict. The conflict does not have to be bad, but be a way for students to communicate and hear others opinions. Many people have eclectic tastes of music and not everyone is going to like the same kind of music, whether it being classical, hip-hop, rap, punk, etc. Some people feel strongly about their music and will stand by it, no matter what. For example, when I tell people that I like bands such as Fall Out Boy or Taking Back Sunday, I have to defend myself, trying to explain that the music is not only about guys breaking up with their girlfriends and then writing about it. I want people to understand that I like that kind of music and everyone can have their own opinions. There are some people who will always disagree and enjoy other kinds of music and that is one of the reasons why people are diverse. Politics is not one of the best topics to bring up at a dinner table here at Penn State but many people have different parties in which they are associated with. Some support Bush and others do not, creating a problem within the community. Not everyone will agree with what is going on in the world and our government but everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. Sports are also a big issue here as well. The main sport here is football and besides our school, it seems that a lot of people either favor the Philadelphia Eagles, or the Pittsburgh Steelers. It seems that everywhere you go, there is at least one person who is against one of the teams and there will not be a happy medium which everyone can be in together. It even happens in the classroom and the online blogs. Everyone at Penn State has their different opinions about sports and it allows diversity to shine threw. It seems that this diversity that Penn State has, is just a way to help people explore what is outside of their usual thinking and beliefs.
Another big reason why we are diverse here at Penn State is due to the fact that everyone here comes from different backgrounds. The majority of the students are from Pennsylvania but there are also students who come from across the country and even from the other side of the world. Some students have different lifestyles, whether they come from a suburb or a city. Some of the students, although being white, may speak another language at the household. For example, I am white but my heritage is Russian. At home, I speak Russian to most of my family members and when I tell that to most people, they find it to be very intriguing. Due to everyone’s backgrounds, it opens individuals up to how different people are from one another which allows one to still get along.
Although we are diverse through opinions and backgrounds, we lack diversity in ethnicity. But when I think about it, we are not as diverse here because the majority of Penn State students are white. Last year, 32,959 students out of a total of 41,289, were white and the others were made up of: African American, Asian American, Hispanic American, Native American, and International students (http://www.budget.psu.edu)∞∞. How can Penn State be considered diverse when approximately eighty percent of the students here are of the same ethnicity? When I researched Temple University, in Philadelphia, only sixty percent of the students there are white, which makes them more of a diverse campus (http://www2.collegeboard.com)∞. It seems that Penn State is trying to make this campus seem like we are very diverse, but in the aspect of ethnicity, it does not come out true. Culturally, we are all the same, maybe differing in religion, but our backgrounds are almost alike.
Penn State should define diversity at Penn State as the student’s opinions and backgrounds. They should also try to include ethnicity when they actually improve their statistics. But when race is considered more, we can then compare and contrast with one another, and realize diversity truly does exist at Penn State.
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Diversity is a unique word. In Webster’s New World Dictionary, it defines diversity as variety, which seems vague. But what is variety? Is it random items grouped together so everything is different? It does not seem that it is specific enough to give a true understanding if Penn State, is truly diverse. At Penn State, I feel that diversity should be defined in the matter of the students having different opinions and backgrounds. But, when considering ethnicity, we are not as diverse due to the fact that variety does not exist as well as Penn State preaches it to be.
I believe that diversity exists at Penn State through the student’s opinions. I feel that every student here has different opinions about music, politics, sports teams, etc. which lead to conflict. The conflict does not have to be bad, but be a way for students to communicate and hear others opinions. Many people have eclectic tastes of music and not everyone is going to like the same kind of music, whether it being classical, hip-hop, rap, punk, etc. Some people feel strongly about their music and will stand by it, no matter what. For example, when I tell people that I like bands such as Fall Out Boy or Taking Back Sunday, I feel that I have to defend myself, trying to explain that the music is not only about guys breaking up with their girlfriends and then writing about it. I want people to understand that I like that kind of music and everyone can have their own opinions. There are some people who will always disagree and enjoy other kinds of music and that is one of the reasons why people are diverse. Politics is not one of the best topics to bring up at a dinner table here at Penn State but many people have different parties in which they are associated with. Some support Bush and others do not, creating a problem within the community. Not everyone will agree with what is going on in the world and our government but everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. Sports are also a big issue here as well. The main sport here is football and besides our school, it seems that a lot of people either favor the Philadelphia Eagles, or the Pittsburgh Steelers. It seems that everywhere you go, there is at least one person who is against one of the teams and there will not be a happy medium which everyone can be in together. It even happens in the classroom and the online blogs. Everyone at Penn State has their different opinions about sports and it allows diversity to shine threw. It seems that this diversity that Penn State has, is just a way to help people explore what is outside of their usual thinking and beliefs.
Another big reason why we are diverse here at Penn State is due to the fact that everyone here comes from different backgrounds. The majority of the students are from Pennsylvania but there are also students who come from across the country and even from the other side of the world. Some students have different lifestyles, whether they come from a suburb or a city. Some of the students, although being white, may speak another language at the household. For example, I am white but my heritage is Russian. At home, I speak Russian to most of my family members and when I tell that to most people, they find it to be very intriguing. Due to everyone’s backgrounds, it opens individuals up to how different people are from one another which allows one to still get along.
Although we are diverse through opinions and backgrounds, we lack diversity in ethnicity. But when I think about it, we are not as diverse here because the majority of Penn State students are white. Last year, 32,959 students out of a total of 41,289, were white and the others were made up of: African American, Asian American, Hispanic American, Native American, and International students (http://www.budget.psu.edu)∞. How can Penn State be considered diverse when approximately eighty percent of the students here are of the same ethnicity? When I researched Temple University, in Philadelphia, only sixty percent of the students there are white, which makes them more of a diverse campus (http://www2.collegeboard.com)∞. It seems that Penn State is trying to make this campus seem like we are very diverse, but in the aspect of ethnicity, it does not come out true. Culturally, we are all the same, maybe differing in religion, but our backgrounds are almost alike.
Penn State should define diversity at Penn State as the student’s opinions and backgrounds. They should also try to include ethnicity when they actually improve their statistics. But when race is considered more, we can then compare and contrast with one another, and realize diversity truly does exist at Penn State.
Works Cited
University Budget Office. “Enrollment by Ethnicity.” http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/Student2000/EnrolbyEthnicitySummary.asp∞∞;
College Board. "Temple University." http://www2.collegeboard.com/search/CollegeDetail.jsp?collegeId=1409∞
Edited on 2005-09-19 20:37:18 by MonicaKras
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Although we are diverse through opinions and backgrounds, we lack diversity in ethnicity. But when I think about it, we are not as diverse here because the majority of Penn State students are white. Last year, 32,959 students out of a total of 41,289, were white and the others were made up of: African American, Asian American, Hispanic American, Native American, and International students (http://www.budget.psu.edu)∞. How can Penn State be considered diverse when approximately eighty percent of the students here are of the same ethnicity? When I researched Temple University, in Philadelphia, only sixty percent of the students there are white, which makes them more of a diverse campus (http://www2.collegeboard.com)∞. It seems that Penn State is trying to make this campus seem like we are very diverse, but in the aspect of ethnicity, it does not come out true. Culturally, we are all the same, maybe differing in religion, but our backgrounds are almost alike.
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Although we are diverse through opinions and backgrounds, we lack diversity in ethnicity. But when I think about it, we are not as diverse here because the majority of Penn State students are white. Last year, 32,959 students out of a total of 41,289, were white and the others were made up of: African American, Asian American, Hispanic American, Native American, and International students (http://www.budget.psu.edu)∞. How can Penn State be considered diverse when approximately eighty percent of the students here are of the same ethnicity (http://www2.collegeboard.com)∞? When I researched Temple University, in Philadelphia, only sixty percent of the students there are white, which makes them more of a diverse campus. It seems that Penn State is trying to make this campus seem like we are very diverse, but in the aspect of ethnicity, it does not come out true. Culturally, we are all the same, maybe differing in religion, but our backgrounds are almost alike.
Edited on 2005-09-19 00:13:10 by MonicaKras
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Diversity is a unique word. In Webster’s New World Dictionary, it defines diversity as variety, which seems vague. But what is variety? Is it random items grouped together so everything is different? It does not seem that it is specific enough to give a true understanding if Penn State, is truly diverse. At Penn State, I feel that diversity should be defined in the matter of the students having different opinions and backgrounds. But, when considering ethnicity, we are not as diverse due to the fact that variety does not exist as well as Penn State preaches it to be.
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Diversity is a unique word. In Webster’s New World Dictionary, it defines diversity as variety, which I feel sounds vague. But what is variety? Is it something that is grouped together from a larger group? It does not seem that it is specific enough to give a true understanding if Penn State is truly diverse. At Penn State, I feel that diversity should be defined in the matter of the students having different opinions and backgrounds. But, when considering ethnicity, we are not as diverse due to the fact that variety does not exist as well as Penn State preaches it to be.
Edited on 2005-09-19 00:09:56 by MonicaKras
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Edited on 2005-09-19 00:09:40 by MonicaKras
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Diversity is a unique word. In Webster’s New World Dictionary, it defines diversity as variety, which I feel sounds vague. But what is variety? Is it something that is grouped together from a larger group? It does not seem that it is specific enough to give a true understanding if Penn State is truly diverse. At Penn State, I feel that diversity should be defined in the matter of the students having different opinions and backgrounds. But, when considering ethnicity, we are not as diverse due to the fact that variety does not exist as well as Penn State preaches it to be.
I believe that diversity exists at Penn State through the student’s opinions. I feel that every student here has different opinions about music, politics, sports teams, etc. which lead to conflict. The conflict does not have to be bad, but be a way for students to communicate and hear others opinions. Many people have eclectic tastes of music and not everyone is going to like the same kind of music, whether it being classical, hip-hop, rap, punk, etc. Some people feel strongly about their music and will stand by it, no matter what. For example, when I tell people that I like bands such as Fall Out Boy or Taking Back Sunday, I feel that I have to defend myself, trying to explain that the music is not only about guys breaking up with their girlfriends and then writing about it. I want people to understand that I like that kind of music and everyone can have their own opinions. There are some people who will always disagree and enjoy other kinds of music and that is one of the reasons why people are diverse. Politics is not one of the best topics to bring up at a dinner table here at Penn State but many people have different parties in which they are associated with. Some support Bush and others do not, creating a problem within the community. Not everyone will agree with what is going on in the world and our government but everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. Sports are also a big issue here as well. The main sport here is football and besides our school, it seems that a lot of people either favor the Philadelphia Eagles, or the Pittsburgh Steelers. It seems that everywhere you go, there is at least one person who is against one of the teams and there will not be a happy medium which everyone can be in together. It even happens in the classroom and the online blogs. Everyone at Penn State has their different opinions about sports and it allows diversity to shine threw. It seems that this diversity that Penn State has, is just a way to help people explore what is outside of their usual thinking and beliefs.
Another big reason why we are diverse here at Penn State is due to the fact that everyone here comes from different backgrounds. The majority of the students are from Pennsylvania but there are also students who come from across the country and even from the other side of the world. Some students have different lifestyles, whether they come from a suburb or a city. Some of the students, although being white, may speak another language at the household. For example, I am white but my heritage is Russian. At home, I speak Russian to most of my family members and when I tell that to most people, they find it to be very intriguing. Due to everyone’s backgrounds, it opens individuals up to how different people are from one another which allows one to still get along.
Although we are diverse through opinions and backgrounds, we lack diversity in ethnicity. But when I think about it, we are not as diverse here because the majority of Penn State students are white. Last year, 32,959 students out of a total of 41,289, were white and the others were made up of: African American, Asian American, Hispanic American, Native American, and International students (http://www.budget.psu.edu)∞. How can Penn State be considered diverse when approximately eighty percent of the students here are of the same ethnicity (http://www2.collegeboard.com)∞? When I researched Temple University, in Philadelphia, only sixty percent of the students there are white, which makes them more of a diverse campus. It seems that Penn State is trying to make this campus seem like we are very diverse, but in the aspect of ethnicity, it does not come out true. Culturally, we are all the same, maybe differing in religion, but our backgrounds are almost alike.
Penn State should define diversity at Penn State as the student’s opinions and backgrounds. They should also try to include ethnicity when they actually improve their statistics. But when race is considered more, we can then compare and contrast with one another, and realize diversity truly does exist at Penn State.
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Works Cited
University Budget Office. “Enrollment by Ethnicity.”
http://www.budget.psu.edu/factbook/Student2000/EnrolbyEthnicitySummary.asp∞∞;
College Board. "Temple University."
http://www2.collegeboard.com/search/CollegeDetail.jsp?collegeId=1409∞